关于《热砂大冒险》的审核意见 Comments on Scorchsand Adventure

鸢尾花家系对钟表小子送审电影《热砂大冒险》的审核意见 A review of the Clockie movie series Scorchsand Adventure, as assessed by the Iris Family for appropriateness.

以下为以拓梦时代为主题的电影——《钟表小子：热砂大冒险》剧本初稿审查意见。

The following is a review of the initial draft of the script for the movie Clockie: Scorchsand Adventure, themed around the Pioneering Era.

该剧本中，为开拓美梦小镇的「热砂乐园」，钟表小子和居民们历经艰险，成功从怪物「恐惧大王」的手中夺回乐园的故事。影片将拓梦时代的历史和钟表小子系列故事相结合，内容生动有趣，艺术水准极高，尤其是最后钟表小子和「拓梦牛仔」同时击中恐惧大王的镜头设计非常精彩，请务必在正式版中保留。

In this script, the story revolves around Clockie and the inhabitants of Dreamville as they embark on a perilous journey to reclaim the paradise from the monster known as "Dread King" in order to pioneer in Dreamville's Scorchsand Wonderland. The script effectively blends elements from the Pioneering Era and the Clockie series, resulting in a captivating narrative and showcasing a high level of artistic quality. Particularly noteworthy is the impressive final scene where Clockie and the Pioneerist simultaneously hit the Dread King. It is highly recommended to retain this scene in the official version.

但本局必须提醒克劳克影业：拓梦者中有正义的伙伴，也不乏狡诈的恶棍。拓梦时期，逐梦客间的械斗时常会威胁居民生活安全，猎犬家系不得不四处巡逻，维护各地治安。但在该作中，对逐梦客的形象美化过度，甚至将部分家族功绩放之逐梦客上，有误导观众之嫌。

However, this administration must remind Clock Studios that there are both virtuous companions and evil villains among the Dreamchasers. During the Pioneering Era, armed conflicts among Dreamchasers often jeopardized the safety of the town's residents, and the Bloodhound Family was devoted to maintaining law and order through their patrols. Regrettably, in this movie, the Dreamchasers are excessively glorified, incorrectly attributing some of The Family's accomplishments to them. This portrayal may be misleading.

此外，「狗狗女警」的造型涉嫌影射猎犬家系，呈现的形象是一位蛮不讲理的治安官，明显是带歧视的刻板印象。据「太阳的时刻」可查资料记载，开拓梦境荒漠的过程中，猎犬家系付出的牺牲并不亚于逐梦客们。令猎犬家系频繁饰演反派角色，易使观众对猎犬产生抵触情绪，破坏猎犬家系在宾客眼中的形象，不符合家族的「同谐」精神，建议修改。

Furthermore, the depiction of the Dog Sheriff potentially alludes to the Bloodhound Family and raises concerns. Dog Sheriff is portrayed as a thuggish security officer, perpetuating a discriminatory stereotype. However, records available in the Moment of Sol suggest that the Bloodhound Family made substantial contributions during the pioneering effort in the barren dreamscapes, on par with the Dreamchasers. Frequent attribution of villainous roles to the Bloodhound Family could lead to audience resentment, tarnishing the Bloodhound Family's image and contradicting The Family's philosophy of Harmony. Therefore, it is recommended to revise the script accordingly.

本局建议：可在剧本中增加狗狗女警与拓梦牛仔的情感戏，以爱情元素替换立场冲突。根据近期的市场调查，观众十分关注角色之间的情感故事，这样的设计有利于该片取得更高的商业价值，也能借此向观众传达匹诺康尼包容、友善的同谐精神。

We suggest incorporating romantic scenes between the Dog Sheriff and the Pioneerist, replacing their conflicting stances with elements of romance. Recent market surveys indicate that audiences are highly interested in stories of relationships between characters. This approach not only enhances the commercial value of the movie but also conveys Penacony's shared values of harmonious tolerance and friendship.

最后，本局需要提醒克劳克影业：近期《钟表小子》电影中身为主角的钟表小子戏份减少，本片中的表现被拓梦牛仔喧宾夺主。审核方理解克劳克影业试图塑造新IP的战略方向，但钟表小子始终是贵影业乃至匹诺康尼的形象代表，建议在后续制作中平衡各角色的剧情占比。

Lastly, we would like to bring to Clock Studios' attention that the role of Clockie has been diminished in recent Clockie movies, and in this script is even overshadowed by the Pioneerist. While we understand the strategic direction of Clock Studios in attempting to establish a new series, it is crucial to note that Clockie has always been the iconic image of your studio and even Penacony. Therefore, we recommend maintaining a balanced share of screen time between each character in your future productions.

期待你们的后续创作。

I look forward to your future creations.

——鸢尾花家系 梦境电影规范管理局

— The Iris Family, Dreamscape Film Regulation Administration